New Haiku

topic posted Mon, February 26, 2007 - 9:09 AM by  Jon
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did a new haiku....

(yes, I don't feel it is true haiku, since the piece is only complete in context of the photos...so maybe it is a haiku-ish poem, rather than a proper haiku)

based on a little photo series I did called "Birds At Dawn" (just posted the series over on my photos)

Super Blue Cool Dawn
Movement Flashes The New Sky
Dawn Calligraphy
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  • Re: New Haiku

    Mon, March 5, 2007 - 5:11 AM
    these aren't so new, but thought I would post them here rather than start a new thread...

    With this today and that
    With noons and mornings and this
    I hope sad sunflowers

    imagination
    I saw an afternoon sky
    mottled blue drinks white



    Two tears telling tales
    My sorrow dances often
    Moon and the acrid

    • Re: New Haiku

      Sat, March 17, 2007 - 8:43 PM
      feeling tired, insomnia, sick and drained....

      Lagging Nagging Now
      Oh No The Again Again
      Laughing Dancing Bones
      • Re: New Haiku

        Tue, March 20, 2007 - 11:32 AM
        (posted some of these before on another tribe)


        vaulting height moon view
        white gray, a soft white light peace
        blue canopy sky

        sky vast vast high height
        tiny black dotted sky flight
        wisps, vaulted power

        The Red Sharp Shock Orange
        Fall Maple Leaves by Hundreds!
        All stop stark against sky

        +++++++++++

        Suburban Landscape Dreams,
        The Sky That Would Wish To Be,
        Full Floated Fluff Stuff.


        So, being me, I can never be satisfied, I have to self-sabotage
        everything I do.

        So, I came up with a couple of comedic twists...

        Version II

        Suburban Landscape Dreams,
        The Sky That Would Wish To Be,
        Jersey: Still Stinks!

        Version III

        Suburban Landscape Dreams,
        The Sky That Would Wish To Be,
        Ken Lay is still dead

        Version IV


        Suburban Landscape Dreams,
        The Sky That Would Wish To Be,
        Gerald Ford: still dead.

        ++++++++++++++++


        paper shreds, flailed
        the scattering to empty
        When I what was once

        ++++


        man today the day
        wishes I stop and move through
        pacing waiting hope

        • Re: New Haiku

          Mon, March 26, 2007 - 9:19 PM
          Dumb Stale Dull Days's Dare
          The Will To Wish To Be Here
          Cold Waiting Pure Freeze
          • Re: New Haiku

            Thu, March 29, 2007 - 8:13 AM
            Eyes and Fire Want
            Tarrying, Temptation's Wish
            Still Calm Wants Cool Peace
            • Re: New Haiku

              Sun, April 29, 2007 - 4:25 AM
              making a haiku out of an old poem...

              Double steel thick locks
              Walls and doors and locks
              steel refuge ingots
  • Re: New Haiku

    Mon, May 14, 2007 - 2:37 AM
    .
    .
    .
    Dawn Calligraphy:
    winshield condensation drips,
    the future spelled out.
    • Re: New Haiku

      Mon, May 14, 2007 - 6:53 AM
      good one Charles!
      • Re: New Haiku

        Sun, May 27, 2007 - 5:37 AM
        Eyes And Millions And
        Tall Trees In The Everywheres
        Black Bird Eyes Darting
        • Re: New Haiku

          Tue, July 3, 2007 - 8:53 PM
          Seventeen Red Beats
          Seventy-Six Strong Blue Beats
          Freedom Hope and Sky
          • Re: New Haiku

            Tue, July 24, 2007 - 9:50 PM
            White Star Center Dance
            Sharp Cool Blue Spiral Primed
            Otherworld Pinwheel

            www.hermann-uwe.de/files/im...iew_0.jpg
            • Re: New Haiku

              Sat, July 28, 2007 - 10:30 AM
              Bird Bird Bird Hop Hop
              Peppy Pop Popping Hop Hop
              Wind Gust, Glance, Then Gone
              • Re: New Haiku

                Thu, September 13, 2007 - 12:24 PM
                Three Thoughtful Tears Today
                Slowly, Deliberate, Calm
                Broken Bones, Mourning
                • Re: New Haiku

                  Fri, September 14, 2007 - 4:28 PM
                  Bloated Ugly Puff
                  Drained Wasted Bold Useless
                  Another Today
                  • This is the maximum depth. Additional responses will not be threaded.

                    Re: New Haiku

                    Thu, September 20, 2007 - 1:55 AM
                    And Now He Is Gone
                    That Toddler's Blond Hair Tossed
                    That Touch And Now Lost
                    • Re: New Haiku

                      Mon, September 24, 2007 - 5:26 AM

                      She-I Was Right-Wrong
                      We Meet-Talk-Fight, Our Sing-Song
                      Broken China Shard
                      • Re: New Haiku

                        Fri, September 28, 2007 - 3:29 AM
                        NYC Commuting
                        Crazed Angry Race To Nowhere
                        Tick Tick Tick Tick Tick
                        • Re: New Haiku

                          Sun, September 30, 2007 - 7:39 AM
                          Rainbow in my sink.
                          God, the sky is low today.
                          Guess I better duck.
                          • Re: New Haiku

                            Mon, October 1, 2007 - 3:14 AM
                            Hear a baby's cry.
                            You do your work, I'll do mine.
                            The way of the world.
                            • Re: New Haiku

                              Mon, October 1, 2007 - 4:48 AM
                              I like that rainbow one, funny, thanks
                              • Re: New Haiku

                                Mon, October 1, 2007 - 6:00 AM

                                Wobbly Baby Walk
                                Tender Chubby Cherub Cheeks
                                Blossom Sunrise Smile
                                • Re: New Haiku

                                  Tue, October 9, 2007 - 2:23 PM
                                  Rectangular Pose
                                  Boxes In Room's Corner's Dirt
                                  Perfect Dust Beauty
                                  • Poetic Prose Musing Haiku

                                    Wed, October 10, 2007 - 6:10 AM
                                    wrote some poetic prose musings

                                    Inspired by interacting with yet another crazed 15 year old online.

                                    This kid reminded me a lot of governments, our government, other governments and, really, all institutions of power.

                                    There is a schoolyard bully around and beating up the other kids.

                                    Seeing that, our institution's decide to stop the bully and use force.

                                    OK.

                                    But the problem is not resolved.

                                    The bully's father is beating him daily. That is the real cause.

                                    And, it seems, no matter how many advanced degrees people have who run the large institutions of power, they still function through the simplest of paradigms, without the barest of reflection as to cause or effect.

                                    Like a gang of Ph's reflecting on whether to punch the bully in the stomach or in the face, issuing 100 page + documents with the pros and cons of each "solution," while never for a second even entertaining the notion of another solution beyond punching, beyond violence, etc.

                                    And not just so with big international global politics...but with all kinds of decisions. The boss choosing to be authoritarian and abusive to employees, even if kindness is not only more effective in achieving the short term business goals, but produces harmony, devotion to work, community spirit - all things, which, in the long run, drive business to true success.

                                    Government Power
                                    Psychotic Myopia Dance
                                    Me Me Me Me Me

                                    Government Power
                                    Spastic Flailing Empty Zero
                                    Only The Heart Knows

                                    Sadistic Mocking
                                    Destruction Invocation
                                    Boomerang Ringing

                                    Endless Useless Toil
                                    But For One Moment Of Peace
                                    Or? - More Useless Toil

                                    A Golden Drop's Calm
                                    The Sweet Taste Of Pure Patience
                                    New World's Dawning

                                    Everyone's Home
                                    Holding Out Warm Heart To All
                                    Clarity Bell Sound

                                    Hatred Struggle Hate
                                    Tortured Dark Devil's Quaking
                                    I Just Cannot Stop

                                    Wanting Much More
                                    Trying Every Wrong Way
                                    Banking My Own End

                                    Coffins All Around
                                    I Take My Cold Nails And Smile
                                    Hammer Them All In

                                    Monkey Mind Dancing
                                    Intelligence's Large BlowBack
                                    What Wondrous Waste





                                    +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
                                    • new

                                      Tue, November 6, 2007 - 2:59 PM

                                      Present Memory
                                      All Hollow Teardrop Echoes
                                      Bending Willow Sigh
                                      • Re: new

                                        Tue, January 29, 2008 - 5:55 PM
                                        Passing And Now Gone
                                        Here Just Not So Long Ago
                                        Time Marching Tear-Ticks
                                        • Re: new

                                          Thu, February 21, 2008 - 2:54 PM
                                          Lunar eclipse haiku

                                          Bright shining night star
                                          Call me to a needed calm
                                          Quirky, so weird joy


                                          Soft air of peace flows
                                          Stunning sky-art-movement-dance
                                          Glorious moment!
                                          • Re: new

                                            Mon, March 3, 2008 - 7:43 AM

                                            Fall From The Mountain
                                            Twists Stare Blankly Dark
                                            One Long Heaving Sigh
                                            • Re: new

                                              Sun, March 23, 2008 - 4:36 PM
                                              Babies Are Beauties
                                              As The Summer Wind Just Ebbs
                                              Smile Soft As Fresh Rain
                                              • Re: new

                                                Tue, April 15, 2008 - 8:06 PM
                                                Demanding Worry
                                                Curiously Intended
                                                Annoyingly There
                                                • Re: new

                                                  Mon, May 5, 2008 - 11:08 AM
                                                  Suburban Jersey
                                                  Quiet Park In The Dead Night,
                                                  Silver Pond Ripples.

                                                  Night Water Ripples,
                                                  Are Pieces of Silver That,
                                                  My Fading Eyes Buy.

                                                  Soft Pink Petals Play,
                                                  Planted Trees Move In Jazz Riffs,
                                                  Accents For All Eyes.

                                                  A New Hope Has Eyes,
                                                  I, Some Distant Empty Spy,
                                                  Outside, Peering, Pale.

                                                  Egret In A Tree,
                                                  Odd white bird staring there!
                                                  Me Odd-Staring Back
                                                  • Re: new

                                                    Sun, July 6, 2008 - 4:37 PM
                                                    a little homage to Hotei

                                                    (little link about him below:)


                                                    www.101zenstories.com/index.php


                                                    Thundering Heaven,
                                                    Smile Like He Tasted The Sky,
                                                    Drank It In Full,Laughed.


                                                    Powerful, Lofty.
                                                    This Infinite Being's Heart:
                                                    Gentle Loving Sigh

                                                    Loves Everything,
                                                    Just Each And Everything!
                                                    Grandmother Heart-Eyes

                                                    Welcome Gratitude
                                                    Feasting On Heart Memories
                                                    Love Always Was Home.
                                                    • Re: new

                                                      Fri, July 18, 2008 - 1:59 AM
                                                      Quiet Night Rolls On
                                                      Solitary Walking Steps
                                                      Calming Moon, Stark Sky

                                                      • Re: new

                                                        Fri, August 1, 2008 - 3:52 PM
                                                        You And I And Us
                                                        As Forevers Forward Onward
                                                        I And You And Ever
  • don't sell it short!

    Sat, August 2, 2008 - 10:54 AM
    The piece stands well without the photo - or rather in place of the photo, which is simply a different way of attempting to capture the essence of the moment. (Which is why so many find pictures and haiku go together - they're both trying to distill the experience of a particular moment into a hyper-condensed expression of it.) I particularly note regarding this poem's image that many cultures (Irish and Hindu among them) contain myths that attribute the inspiration prompting the invention of the letter forms in their various alphabets to the observation of birds (in the cases cited, cranes) in flight. The universality of the image I think places it squarely within the realm of "true, proper" haiku - at least as much as can be accomplished in English with the absence of particular seasonal terms, etc. which additionally define the original form in Japanese.
    • Re: don't sell it short!

      Sat, August 2, 2008 - 3:32 PM
      oh, thanks for your kind words!


      • waves

        Sat, October 18, 2008 - 11:21 AM
        from the prompt of...
        "waves"

        What Flows Within Me
        Movement Takes Me Where It Will
        Waves As Coursing Breath
        • new one

          Tue, November 4, 2008 - 8:45 AM
          A New Frost Etches
          The Disappearing Valley
          Frozen Soft White Dew
          • Re: new one

            Tue, April 21, 2009 - 4:59 PM
            Dogwood, white and plum

            These blossoms like open palms

            White, purple and plum
            • Re: new one

              Thu, April 23, 2009 - 4:28 AM
              Bright Spring Sunshining
              Chasing Winter's Lines Away
              I Can Live Like This
              • Re: new one

                Mon, May 11, 2009 - 10:14 PM
                The Newer Spring Breathes
                Sunshine Is a Secret Smile
                Fresh Sweet Hope's New Ray
                • Re: new one

                  Sat, September 12, 2009 - 7:36 PM
                  The Simple Secret
                  The Daily Struggle's Pale Toil
                  Diamond From Coal
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                    Re: new one

                    Wed, September 23, 2009 - 8:59 AM
                    Rich Red Fall Maple
                    All Fine Stark Shock Against Sky,
                    Flaming Leaves' Offering

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